Does anyone want to change the script of "Last Twilight" a bit?

I know I am pretty late because this series released a year ago. I have finished it not so long before. Although it was great, the drama in ep 11 really put me off a bit. It was an unnecessary drama. The fact that they reunited after three years seems unrealistic to me. If I were to change the script, I would build the character of Day a normal person at the beginning of the series, he and Mhok will meet and grow feelings for each other. But then an accident happens and Day loses his vision. Despite that, Mohk still stays by his side, which shows his genuine love for Day. Day won't lose hope and he continues his life regardless of difficulities. The final episode will be the same as in the ep 9 when the final image that Day sees is Mohk's face (I wanted to build the character of Day not born in a rich family so that he doesn't get to have eye donation). I believe this makes the storyline and the messages more impactful. What's your opinion on this?